User talk:EndlessSummer19/Thrombopoiesis

Latest comment: 3 years ago by Vbam25

Hello EndlessSummer19, I liked the structure of your article. You were able to break down the main points in a hierarchical order, which made the article easy to understand and follow through. I would like to suggest a few things: - I think it would be useful to add some sort of picture. I have found some pretty good ones online. In that way, you would make the readers understand and visualize the material better. - I have some editing suggestions. In paragraph 3, this sentence: “The process of Thrombopoiesis is caused by the breakdown of proplatelets (mature megakaryocyte membrane pseudopodial projections)during the process of almost all of the membranes, organelles, granules, and soluble macromolecules in the cytoplasm being consume” could be broken down into 2 sentences. Also after the second parenthesis, there isn’t a space or a period. This would make the paragraph more easy to understand, as I had trouble reading the information at first. - Lastly, I would suggest adding subheadings to the article, so that the information can be depicted better. You could also add more information that would make the article more complete and insightful. Overall you did a good job. Keep it up! Vbam25 (talk) 14:57, 29 October 2020 (UTC)Reply