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Week 11 - Peer Review and Copy Edit by Jessica Barron

Hi Elizabeth,

Overall your article draft for “bunting” is well done and I found the topic to be quite interesting. I did not find any major issues with your article, but I did make one small edit and I have a couple of suggestions for improvement. Your lead section was easy to understand and gives a good overview of what bunting is. However, it might be beneficial to edit the sentence “Bunting and allorubbing are also part of feral cat behaviour within colonies.” to include what is meant by allorubbing. I could not easily find online what allorubbing means so it might be a good idea to give a short explanation of what is meant by this. I do not have any suggestions for the “Development” section as it was well done and gave two solid examples of the development of bunting behaviour in two separate species. Lastly, for the section “Bunting in other Species” I made a small edit by changing “This occurs when one cattle shows submission, during the final moments of the feud” to “This occurs when one cattle shows submission during the final moments of a feud” for clarity. Your article draft had a clear structure and the content was completely neutral. The coverage for your draft was balanced as it includes examples of bunting behaviour from a variety of species other than cats, which most often display this behaviour. All of your references appear to be from reliable sources except for possibly the fourth, “It’s all mine! Cat marking, Explained”, which appears to be from an unreliable source.

Week 11 - Peer Review by Jordyn Cole

Hi Elizabeth,

I found this article about the bunting behaviour to be quite interesting. You did an excellent job at defining the behaviour itself while providing necessary examples of various species in which this behaviour is best demonstrated. I can provide a couple possible ways to elaborate/edit the article. First and foremost, ensure that all sources are reliable. It is crucial that the all information used in this article comes from a reliable source. Secondly, you could slightly elaborate on this article by mentioning and expanding on the domestic bunting interactions between cats and humans and how it is often misinterpreted by humans as a sign of affection or as a desire for attention. Otherwise, the article was well-organized and had a very neutral tone. Great job! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jordynhcole (talk • contribs) 18:09, 18 March 2018 (UTC)