Well done! I second the reviewer comments. Let me know if you have any questions. --Amille75 (talk) 04:26, 7 December 2015 (UTC)
General comments:
- What is the main take home message of this article?
- Crotalaria is a genus that contains many highly nutritious species. Several of the species have be cultivated and domesticated for centuries to serve as nutritious food. Many of the species also have the potential to resist disease making it an interesting genus to study.
- What do you like about this Wikipedia contribution? What do you dislike?
- I like the way the contribution was broken up. It began with general information about the genus and then went into detail about specific species and their benefits.
- Is there anything written that doesn’t make sense?
- Paragraph 1 Sentence 2: Africa is the richest… - the richest what? Maybe something like: Africa has a rich and diverse population of Crotalaria, with approximately 400 species growing in the continent.
- Paragraph 1 Last Sentence: As a result, it can be said..., this is a really important sentence with a lot of good material! But I would suggest changing the phrase “was proven” to something more like, “these studies suggest that…” Studies cannot prove anything, they only provide further evidence to support hypotheses.
- Paragraph 2 Last sentence: To ensure the survivale… - this is a really interesting sentence, but I am not sure if it fits with the paragraph. The previous sentence talks about health benefits. Also I would suggest rewording the end of the sentence to “are often selected for higher yields, higher nutritional value, and resistance to disease.” The current sentence makes it sound like its selected for its resistance to yield and nutritional value too.
- What questions do you have as you are reading the text? Be specific.
- I would like to know more about the specific health benefits Crotalaria have to humans. Give examples.
- Paragraph 3 sentences 1 – What are pre-Hispanic times? Pre-Colombian?
- Paragraph 3 sentence 7 – Why is it a valuable genetic resource
Grammar
- Do you see any spelling errors? Are there any periods or commas that are missing or out-of-place?
- Not that I noticed
- Are all scientific names written correctly, italicized with the genus name capitalized and the specific epithet starting with a lower case?
- Yes
References
- Are there five distinct references?
- Yes
- Are each of the references from a scientific journal?
- Yes
- Are the references cited correctly?
- For the first citation, I do not think there needs to be the DOI number.
Mfmasson (talk) 17:42, 28 November 2015 (UTC)
General comments: This is impressive work. You are providing detailed facts about the genus that is novel with respect to the original article and does not overlap with the additions of fellow contributors (I have also chosen to write about Crotalaria). You've also written the information in a neatly-written way that suggests its value as a potential crop plant through the explanations of your carefully chosen studies. Rather than telling readers that it is a genus of highly potential value, you inspire them with the rich facts that you share, which would inspire future researchers to consider studying this species. Personally, I've found research on the Crotalaria genus to be painstaking. I came across too many articles that discussed the plants' toxicity and its usage as fodder, manure, or as a cover crop, and not enough about its extensive versatility in function and its harvestability. You've amazed me with all the facts that I didn't even know, especially its history! I'm sure you'll blow many other future readers away who had very limited expectations of what this genus can do.
I second what Mfmasson has said. You've organized your information to begin with the general facts about the genus as a whole and then narrowed to details about specific species. The order is great, but I would only suggest that you move your move what you've discussed about the study involving the habitat and growth habit of Crotalaria species Crotalaria brevidens from the introduction and into another subheading. In other words, I think everything from "To further analyze the differences in crop yield..." all the way to "...in swamplands than in deciduous bush lands." should be placed in another heading that discusses specific properties. I only say this because I believe the Introduction should discuss general briefly while specifics such as the outcomes of a study should be written in detail within the middle of an article. It's like writing and discussing a quote from a book in a traditional five-paragraph essay in the introductory paragraph of an English paper.
Mfmasson has also done a good job of nitpicking minor details of your work that should be addressed or corrected. I personally do not see any other flaws that he/she hasn't talked about besides a typo in the 2nd to last sentence of the 3rd paragraph: "Alongisde, this, Crotalaria brevidens and Crotalaria ochroleuca can be used as cover crops." "Alongisde" needs to be corrected to "Alongside."
I see that there are five distinct references from scientific journals. But, I don't think it should matter if there is a DOI number in the first citation. I've seen DOI numbers being included in the citations of many scientifically-based Wikipedia articles. You've already included all of the essential information that are required in a citation of a scientific paper, so I don't see anything wrong.
Asehizad (talk) 17:14, 1 December 2015 (UTC)asehizad
General comments:
- What is the main take home message of this article?
- Crotalaria is a genus that is particularly beneficial to humans due to their rich nutrient content that has been used as a source of food as well as for disease prevention/resistance for centuries. The genus is geographically diverse and has contributed significantly to the cultures of both African and Asian countries.
- What do you like about this Wikipedia contribution? What do you dislike?
- I really liked how you organized all of your information. It is helpful to see the big picture first and then discuss the details. It was also really helpful in understanding the information presented.
- I also really liked how your sentences flowed with the use of transition words. This helps the reader continue reading and connect the information.
- At the end of the first paragraph, instead of having the example in parentheses, I would make that an actual sentence.
- I really enjoyed the history that was provided as well as a geographic representation of the growth and uses of the plant.
- You mentioned that there are many health benefits. It would be interesting to know if there is any information regarding outcomes and benefits specific to certain health issues. Also, uses aside from food that would be beneficial to human health.
- Is there anything written that doesn’t make sense?
- “Pre-Hispanic” times was used in paragraph 3 but I do not understand what that exactly means. Does that also mean that the species is found in South American Countries?
- What questions do you have as you are reading the text? Be specific.
- In addition to what was mentioned above and what was mentioned in the other comments of other students, no other questions.
Grammar
- Do you see any spelling errors? Are there any periods or commas that are missing or out-of-place?
- No, not that I noticed.
- Are all scientific names written correctly, italicized with the genus name capitalized and the specific epithet starting with a lower case?
- Yes.
References
- Are there five distinct references?
- Yes.
- Are each of the references from a scientific journal?
- Yes.
- Are the references cited correctly?
- Yes. I also agree that DOI numbers can be used in citations. I think that it is left as an option but not necessarily a set rule.