Hey David,
I think you have a lot of really good information to work with. You have a lot of material and a lot of it is very insightful and interesting. I think you may need to go over some of the sentence structures and check your grammar. Also, the citation formatting is very simple on wikipedia and it helps you on the top bar. I would be cautious about referencing authors in the actual page because I do not think that is necessary.
Cheers, Sam
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