User talk:DarienG2000/sandbox

Article draft feedback

You have a good start to some article additions here! Demographic information can be a good component to include. Some notes I have as you continue researching, adding, and revising are:

• what else are you currently researching for this neighborhood? Additional content is the biggest suggestion I would make as you continue working on this--what research are you still doing, and what information are you finding that will help you improve this article further?
• how are you planning on organizing this information? It looks like you're planning to break some piece out into separate sections with headings, which seems like a good idea. How will you determine what information stays in the lead versus what gets sections in the body of the article?
• every time a statement of fact is made (such as "As of the 2010 Census Brentwood-Darlington has a population of 12,994"), add the source at the end of that sentence rather than only once at the end of the paragraph.
• after you've completed further additions and are to a proofreading stage, looking closely at some sentence structures might be helpful (for example, it jumped out to me that the Hispanic/Latino demographic information was a separate sentence rather than part of the demographic list)

I think those are my biggest notes based on this draft. Let me know if you have any questions, and I look forward to seeing your final edits! Nicoleccc (talk) 17:11, 9 November 2019 (UTC)