User talk:Cochrash/sandbox

Apt551_Cochrash_P3PR

Major Points

This article is focusing on one subject, which is, the results that can arise from motor coordination problems in childhood development. This section could be stronger if the age or developmental stage motor coordination problems arise was specified as being any age or at a specific stage. I may also suggest adding a sentence about what the environmental stress hypothesis is or a link to where a definition of it can be found. Giving examples of motor coordination problems that arise for some children during development or a link to a page on motor coordination problems could also make this addition stronger. I may also suggest defining what internalizing symptoms are or adding a link to this term. I found this article to be clear, concise and to the point. The writing seems to be encyclopedic writing because it is not bias, nor persuasive and it has a neutral point of view. This article had what seemed to be solid primary sources, but I could not access the articles for free with the articles that had links in their citations. The way the citations were written follow Wikipedia's recommended style.

Minor Points

I wasn’t quite sure what was going on under the Sample Articles section in the sandbox. I assume they are either going to be developed sections or are just notes for the authors own purpose. I did not notice any spelling errors, grammatical mistakes or punctuation issues! Overall I think this will be a good addition.