User talk:Cgord14/sandbox

Latest comment: 8 years ago by Josefhoracek in topic The Lead

Sources

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From the information you provided, it looks like your sources don't actually support the claim that Ruth called the shot. You either have to do further research (I bet this would be mentioned in Babe Ruth's biographies), or you need to add language to the article saying that this story is unconfirmed or disputed. You can cite your sources, especially the second one, to support that. Josef Horáček (talk) 00:16, 21 February 2016 (UTC)Reply

Your revision is a lot better. Be sure that the WP article does convey the sense that while we do have some evidence for what happened, not all of the accounts are in agreement. Go ahead and make the changes in the article. Josef Horáček (talk) 15:10, 25 February 2016 (UTC)Reply

The Lead

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Your lead is a good start, but it reflects some of the weaknesses in the article. The article has a major problem: many of the sections are about dental care in general, having nothing to do with Australia, and they read like a tutorial. The only relevant sections are "Statistics" and "Fluoridation," and those are the sections you should summarize in your lead. Revise the lead and email me when it's ready. Josef Horáček (talk) 11:03, 26 February 2016 (UTC)Reply

The revision is an improvement. You should post the lead. Josef Horáček (talk) 19:25, 9 March 2016 (UTC)Reply