User talk:Cgarza3/sandbox
Latest comment: 9 years ago by Josefhoracek in topic Assignment 3
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Psychokinesis
this is the article I intend to edit for grammar,tone, etc.Cgarza3 (talk) 18:58, 7 February 2015 (UTC)
- Approved. For one, you should remove the shorthand PK and use the full word throughout. Josef Horáček (talk) 21:56, 7 February 2015 (UTC)
- I see you're using the same article for the second assignment. The article seem pretty well sourced, but of course you can still make improvements if you see the need. Your sources look promising. Josef Horáček (talk) 20:50, 16 February 2015 (UTC)
- The editor who contacted you on your talk page, @LuckyLouie:, was right. Some of your sources indeed do not meet the standards of scholarly objectivity. As I said above, the article on psychokinesis is well sourced. I recommend that you choose a different article to work on for this assignment. I'm happy to give you an extension until Monday, Feb. 23. Josef Horáček (talk) 20:12, 20 February 2015 (UTC)
- The new article you chose for assignment 2 is much better. Josef Horáček (talk) 15:47, 26 February 2015 (UTC)
- The editor who contacted you on your talk page, @LuckyLouie:, was right. Some of your sources indeed do not meet the standards of scholarly objectivity. As I said above, the article on psychokinesis is well sourced. I recommend that you choose a different article to work on for this assignment. I'm happy to give you an extension until Monday, Feb. 23. Josef Horáček (talk) 20:12, 20 February 2015 (UTC)
- I see you're using the same article for the second assignment. The article seem pretty well sourced, but of course you can still make improvements if you see the need. Your sources look promising. Josef Horáček (talk) 20:50, 16 February 2015 (UTC)
Assignment 3
editI'm not convinced that "Federation of Gay Games" is a good article for this project. You correctly noted that it's very short and poorly researched. You'd have to do a lot more than just summarize the article for a new lead; you'd have to conduct substantial research. If you're invested in the topic, go ahead, but otherwise I recommend that you choose a different article. Josef Horáček (talk) 15:47, 26 February 2015 (UTC)
- Your lead looks good. I suggest that you change "after he dealt with first-hand, the prejudice" to "after he dealt first-hand with the prejudice." Josef Horáček (talk) 20:03, 2 March 2015 (UTC)