Ccc09
Please add new comments at the end of this page - I've moved the help request down there. Chzz ► 14:30, 1 February 2011 (UTC)
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{{helpme}} What is most import to change to this article and how? Ccc09 (talk) 13:11, 1 February 2011 (UTC)
- Are you asking about Cees van Riel?--SPhilbrickT 13:40, 1 February 2011 (UTC)
- I just entered a meeting expected to last an hour or so. If someone else helps great, if not, I'll comment in a little over an hour.--SPhilbrickT 14:03, 1 February 2011 (UTC)
- Don't put external links, such as http://www.eur.nl/ and corporatecommunication, in the article itself; they can only be used in a special section at the end for == External links == - and then, only subject to certain conditions; see WP:EL
- All facts need a reference to a reliable source - such as the stated date-of-birth.
- It is especially important to have good, independent reliable sources (e.g. newspaper, book) for any claims, such as, "This was the first programme of its kind, offered at a university level (Master Degree), in the world."
- Any information that cannot be supported by an appropriate reliable source should be removed
- Some of the language is vague - for example "a variety of companies" - state facts; be precise. How many, what companies, and where is a reference. Other wording is not neutral e.g. "an influential Dutch scientist"[according to whom?]
- The section 'EcQ - The Strategic Alignment Monitor was copied from a website - here - so, I had to remove it.
- Do not copy text from other websites. Doing so is a copyright violation.
- If you did write it yourself, see WP:DCM.
- Please shorten the section on "Books and articles" - we do not need an exhaustive list; a short paragraph of prose, mentioning examples, would be much better. Wikipedia is not a directory.
- The article is mostly based on references from "Rotterdam School of Management", and could do with more independent reliable sources, to help show why the person is "notable".
Chzz ► 14:42, 1 February 2011 (UTC)
- Chzz gave a lot of detailed advice, I'll comment from a slightly different perspective. I see two interrelated issues:
- It reads like a CV
- It has no independent sources
- Independent sources are the lifeblood of Notability, but they are more than that. If you use multiple sources independent of the subject, you are more naturally going to have a NPOV style (not guaranteed, but more likely). By using only sources from the source, it is going to read more like a CV, more like an advertisement for the person instead of a neutral biography.--SPhilbrickT 15:12, 1 February 2011 (UTC)
Thanks both! I will have a try.Ccc09 (talk) 15:17, 1 February 2011 (UTC)