User talk:Carlettarachelle/sandbox
Latest comment: 8 years ago by Josefhoracek in topic The Lead
Sources
editPlease post your sources in the sandbox. Josef Horáček (talk) 16:13, 26 October 2015 (UTC)
- I saw that you added the sources to the article. Notice, though, that the citations are incorrect. "Shibboleth Authentication Request" is not a source title. The references should look the way they look in your sandbox. Josef Horáček (talk) 17:58, 3 November 2015 (UTC)
The Lead
editIt's a start, but there are several problems you need to fix. First of all, when did Castro become president of Cuba? What was he before that? That should be the first sentence. You can look up that info in the main WP article on Fidel Castro. Secondly, if you mention NAM, you should explain what it is - spell it out. Finally, make sure to proofread your lead carefully. At the very least, you should have all the verbs in correct tenses and eliminate run-on sentences. Josef Horáček (talk) 19:46, 1 November 2015 (UTC)
- It's a lot better. You should delete the part about NAM - you got it completely wrong, and it isn't essential. Josef Horáček (talk) 20:41, 8 November 2015 (UTC)