User talk:Capejoani/sandbox
Notes for Peer Review from Emiliepichot (talk) 17:38, 26 November 2018 (UTC) This looks great! Significant contributions to the information there, more citations, and a whole new section. You improved the flow of the text and included more details. The photo of the pin is also a good addition!
-Consider adding internal links (even if they don't exist and come up red) for the following: chronic bronchitis, asthma, Colorado Springs, Alice Paul (internal link not included in one section), Gladys Grenier, Gertrude Crocker
-add more categories, if possible!
-consider adding an external links & further reading section, if possible
-make sure she is linked in other pages like the "List of Suffragists and Suffragettes"
-consider changing this phrasing: "the destination was the White House"
-if possible, add more info as to why the suffragettes repeated words of Wilson at Lafayette's Tomb
-if possible, include more info on "Watchfires" (what were they and what was their purpose?) with an internal or red link
-add a heading for the citations section
-will the title next to her name be Suffragette or Suffragist?
-still include the quote in the original version
— Preceding unsigned comment added by Emiliepichot (talk • contribs) 17:46, 26 November 2018 (UTC)
- Thank you for your comments and suggestions, Emilie. I have added some more internal links. I had intended to keep that quote from the original article; I just transferred those areas that I was editing, so had not included that in my sandbox. You have made some great suggestions for further edits; in particular, I would like to do more on the Watchfires.
Capejoani (talk) 19:49, 26 November 2018 (UTC)
Capejoani your edits look great! I think Emiliepichot covered most of what I was thinking. I would recommend following Wiki formatting for headings: Capitalize first letter of the first word subsequent words are lower case: Early life, Education and career, Personal life, Later years, etc. Keep up the good work! Tillyaceous (talk) 18:23, 27 November 2018 (UTC)