User talk:Canipleasegetausername/sandbox

Peer Review

Terminology - There are a few terms that could also be linked to their Wikipedia pages (e.g. genus, embryonate, miracidia). Some sentences are hard for me (a non-parasite-expert) to understand (e.g. the eggs embryonate and hatch into miracidia). I would suggest writing these out into a few sentences so readers can digest the heavy info load. Maybe pretend you are explaining it to a high school-er while you are writing. What's a definitive host? Is "fasciola" singular or plural? Inconsistent within article. A few instances of writing around the point could be simplified to help increase "Encyclopedic writing" (e.g. They can both infect --> Both species can infect)

Writing - I find the article to use the right depth of information, neutrality, and upfront presentation for a Wikipedia article. Most of the article uses good strightforward sentence structure, only a few sentences are written in reverse order (e.g. "Fasciola has infected humans since at least Ancient Egypt, as mummies have been found with Fasciola eggs").

Structure - I would recommend adding just a couple more sentences of information to the lead/top section that summarizes the entire article, maybe like an abstract. I like the structure of the article. I would only recommend moving the History section up as the first section after the lead. How do you feel about a Description section?

Sections splitting - I'm wondering how useful the History section is for the information presented here. Maybe that information could go elsewhere? Or the two last sentences could go under a Discovery section?

Thisisquitealongusername (talk) 17:57, 18 November 2019 (UTC)