User talk:CSkibba07/sandbox

There are no grammatical errors and the paragraphs are well written. I would suggest, however, that you use a variety of word choices to start your paragraphs. (Swpols410 (talk) 21:54, 14 February 2011 (UTC) )

winona2012 Looks good, you have provided a good overview of the articles you researched and good explanation of why they are relevant. I would suggest that you don't start every paragraph with "This website". Also you could explain what exactly you are researching..

Don't start every paragraph with 'This website' otherwise it is a good description of the website. Are you studying which was more effective? It isn't clear. Jessben12 (talk)

have to agree with everyone else ... don't start with "this website". otherwise good start! AHughes08 (talk) 22:16, 14 February 2011 (UTC) — Preceding unsigned comment added by CSkibba07 (talk • contribs)

Hello Erhall (talk) 22:10, 14 February 2011 (UTC)

So Far so good, just try and use a variety of words instead of repeating yourself to make the paper more exciting to read and credible. Keep up the good work!BBurns08 (talk) 17:27, 21 February 2011 (UTC)BBurns08

Solid start, but consider adding a background/information paragraph-- it is unclear what your study is (unless you know previously). Jlinehan07 (talk) 19:42, 21 February 2011 (UTC)

It looks like you have found some interesting sources but there are a couple things that you could do to improve. I would suggest writing and introduction to the review so that we have a better understanding of your topic. Also I would suggest that you correct what ever problem there is with citing your sources. Jjdick3978 —Preceding undated comment added 20:33, 21 February 2011 (UTC).

Good feedback from your peers. Continue to pull in evidence and facts from your sources as well as cite them throughout your review of lit. Erhall (talk) 18:35, 28 February 2011 (UTC)