General comments:
- What is the main take home message of this article?
- Elymus lanceolatus has many unique characteristics that make it a viable and useful species for human consumption. The use of E. lanceolatus can help improve farm land, thus improving crop yield. Elymus lanceolatus is also an important crop for cattle and farm animals. Overall, E. lanceolatus should be considered a species of interest to the agricultural community.
- What do you like about this Wikipedia contribution? What do you dislike?
- The introduction paragraph is really clear and concise. The following paragraphs made great arguments for the importance of E. lanceolatus. The contribution overall is very well organized
- I would suggest ending the last paragraph with a concluding sentence on the importance of Elymus lanceolatus’s evolution. Ending the paragraph with an example leaves the paragraph unfinished and hanging.
- Is there anything written that doesn’t make sense?
- No, the contribution was well-written.
- What questions do you have as you are reading the text? Be specific.
- Paragraph 2 sentence 3 – what is a sod? How does that help soil health?
Grammar
- Do you see any spelling errors? Are there any periods or commas that are missing or out-of-place?
- Paragraph 1, sentence 4: The bloom period… - there should be a comma before the “and”
- Paragraph 2, sentence 6: In a study… - this may be a personal preference, but instead of the word “notice”, using “examined” or “investigated the effects of Tarmarix on E. lanceolatus growth” strengthen the sentence and sounds more legitimate.
- Paragraph 3, Sentence 6: It is additionally… there should be a comma before “because”
- Are all scientific names written correctly, italicized with the genus name capitalized and the specific epithet starting with a lower case?
- Yes
References
- Are there five distinct references?
- Yes
- Are each of the references from a scientific journal?
- Yes
- Are the references cited correctly?
- Yes
Mfmasson (talk) 18:32, 28 November 2015 (UTC)
General: Your information is excellent at demonstrating the usefulness of cultivating Elymus lanceolatus! I especially like your tie-in with evolutionary biology at the end. Your contribution is well organized, and all of your writing is clear. You clearly did an excellent job with your research. My only question might be what exactly suggests that the plant may be inedible?
Grammar: Just some very minor things.
- You need a comma before the “and” in your fourth sentence.
- You could turn “Tamarix” into a link to the tamarix Wikipedia page. That might be helpful to those unfamiliar with the genus.
- I’m not sure, but I think that you might have meant “coarse” instead of “course” in your second to last sentence?
Sources: All five sources are there, and they’re all cited correctly! Nice!
General comments:
- The introduction paragraph is really clear and concise. The following paragraphs made great arguments for the importance of E. lanceolatus. The contribution overall is very well organized
- I would suggest ending the last paragraph with a concluding sentence on the importance of Elymus lanceolatus’s evolution. Ending the paragraph with an example leaves the paragraph unfinished and hanging.
- Is there anything written that doesn’t make sense?
- No, the contribution was well-written.
- What questions do you have as you are reading the text? Be specific.
- Paragraph 2 sentence 3 – what is a sod? How does that help soil health?
Srcheng (talk) 02:40, 1 December 2015 (UTC)
General comments:
- Great job! It was really well done
- I liked the introduction, since it was really informative.
- I checked out the Wikipedia page for Elymus Lanceolatus (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Elymus_lanceolatus) to double check that no information was repeated. A lot of your information was new and informative but some things are repetitive if this is the page you are adding to. For instance, both your sandbox and the Wikipedia page for Elymus Lanceolatus state that the grass comes from western United States. I would double check that information is not being repeated.
- Your citations were good, and everything flowed
- I like how you used multiple citations to further some of your points.
Grammar
- In the sentence, “This may indirectly help human food consumption as E. lanceolatus may improve soil health.” I would change one “may” to “can.”
References
- Third paragraph, what is the reference for this, “Elymus lanceolatushas specifically been used for animal foraging. Though E. lanceolatus does not produce a nut or berry product, it can be consumed by grazing animals.” Is it with the first citation? I wasn’t sure.