User talk:BexarTech/Negative pressure wound therapy draft

Comments on draft

User:BexarTech wisely requested comments on this draft revision. While interesting, it has the air of promotional material. If the article is about the therapy, most of the material on manufacturers, specific device types, and their regulatory approvals should be cut. Except for a transient mention, we normally focus on established non-proprietary names for devices and drugs.

With regard to references, we avoid primary sources so far as possible, and then if unavoidable, we use them with circumspection. See wp:MEDRS and wp:PSTS for details. I'd suggest trying to stick with sources on this list for starters. To avoid any appearance of selection bias, I would recommend that you favour broad systematic reviews, particularly ones which are fairly current. Given the stated (thank you) COI potential, you may want to have a compiled set of e-copies of those references handy that you can pass along to an independent reviewer. This is particularly pertinent to backing up any statements that bear upon your interests.

On the direct content, I'll defer comment until later, except for terminology:

• "negative" pressure is a misnomer. It is simply "reduced below ambient", but it is still above zero. As the term seems to be in regretably common usage, I wouldn't propose going against that usage, but rather that you provide a simple explanatory note to clarify it.
• the article's working title is "negative pressure wound therapy", hence NPWT comes up a lot. I'd vary that with "the therapy", "these techniques", "these devices", "these dressings" etc. when that is sufficiently clear.
• the alternate names given, "topical negative pressure", "sub-atmospheric pressure dressings", "vacuum-assisted closure", and "vacuum sealing technique" should be either explicitly distinguished from each other or stated to be equivalent. If they are equivalent, the article should prefer the most commonly used name in the reviews.

Cheers, LeadSongDog come howl! 20:11, 2 June 2011 (UTC)