Berkeleywalker
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--SPhilbrickT 12:50, 6 September 2009 (UTC)
LittleMissMatched edit
First, I moved your draft to a subpage User:Berkeleywalker/LittleMissMatched.
The user page is for information about you. One of the best ways to write a draft article is to do it in user space, rather than the main space, but it should be in a subpage, as it is now.
Second, there is a place to ask for feedback, WP:FEED. Go to that page, and click in the box near the bottom to ask for feedback. Warning, this age isn't patrolled as often as I would like, so it might take some time. I will also try to offer you some specific feedback later.--SPhilbrickT 12:59, 6 September 2009 (UTC)
- Well done for asking for feedback! However, the article is not ready for publication yet. At first I thought it was too much like advertising, but then I realised that it was mainly that it lacked a lead section, so I have written one. I have also suggested a change to the section structure, and formatted your section headings.
- There are some other formatting problems: you need to format your references using <ref> - see WP:REFERENCES: I would have tried doing so, but I actually can't make sense of the references as you have presented them. It is desirable to use <ref> on particular information in the text, to show source for each fact you give, and then include a {{references}} template at the bottom where the actual citations will appear.
- There are some strange characters in your text, such as the pair round "Zany, Marvelous, Fabulous, and Kooky" - I'm guessing that you have cut and pasted from something like Word, which has inserted some sort of non-standard 'smart quotes'. They might show up as you intended in some browsers, but they don't in mine: you need to replace these with something more normal.
- You should also wikilink where appropriate, as I have done for 'clothing' (see WP:LINK), and put your article in at least one category (see WP:CAT).
- But this is a good start.
- If you want to reply to me, please do so here, but leave me a message by editing my talk page. creating a new section at the bottom, and inserting {{talkback|BerkeleyWalker}} there.--ColinFine (talk) 17:17, 6 September 2009 (UTC)
- An additional comment, you shouldn't use symbols such as ™ - see Wikipedia:Manual of Style (trademarks). Otherwise, it's a fairly good start! — QuantumEleven 07:51, 7 September 2009 (UTC)