User talk:Bakeandshake/sandbox

Latest comment: 4 years ago by Adrishaw

I have seen my professor and peer's comments on what I need to improve on and I agree with them. I have made a lot of grammatical changes, which is good, but I do need to add much more content as well. I also need to be more specific in what I am editing and where I am putting it in my article. I also do like the sources I have so far but I would like to add more reliable ones, though those may be hard to come by but I will try my best so that the article's quality of content doesn't take a hit.


I feel like I have a decent amount of sources and content, but what else could I add to spice up my work? What other places do you suggest looking for more sources? — Preceding unsigned comment added by Bakeandshake (talkcontribs) 01:11, 19 November 2019 (UTC)Reply

Adrishaw (talk) 17:36, 19 November 2019 (UTC)You should go back to the Terry Flew chapter 2 reading from way back at the start of the semester. He has a definition of convergence you could cite and add here. In addition, you can see if there are any images you could add for the piece. Moreover, the article only discusses the United States, a good substantive contribution would be to add information on even one other country (most of your edits so far are copy edits, and a few citations but you can add a bit more to make it substantive). Also as you edit make sure that you make it very clear where in the existing article each edit will go.Reply

How much should I develop a section of an article? What I mean by that is, when do I know I've done enough addition to a new section of an article?

Adrishaw (talk) 17:36, 19 November 2019 (UTC)It should be clear 1. what the new section is about and 2. how it relates to the main article. If you have explained that much you should be fine.Reply

Can I use popular but not scholarly websites, as long as they are truthful and unbiased in any way? — Preceding unsigned comment added by Bakeandshake (talkcontribs) 03:46, 19 November 2019 (UTC)Reply

I tried to add more sources, and information, but had a lot of trouble finding articles and reading I could access. This includes the Flew reading, in which I couldn't find the definition for convergence in there. I will still try to look to see what I can add.

Adrishaw (talk) 17:36, 19 November 2019 (UTC)As long as they are a legitimate source like a newspaper or research organization.Reply