User talk:Aobennyarko/sandbox

This comment is signed. Rudibatzell (talk) 00:04, 20 October 2017 (UTC)

Peer-Review

I think you have good sources and a good cover of the various factors that lead to the lynching. I think one thing that could be improved is the organizational aspects, such as including headings and dividing the page by subject matter. I would also see if the Library has any more information so there isn't a huge amount of online sources. Klayk (talk) 20:04, 21 October 2017 (UTC)

I like the content of your article, and the detail of your description. You have a good amount of sources as well. I would agree that the structure could be worked on a littleNicoleelkins (talk) 20:28, 22 October 2017 (UTC)

You have a lot of information that is all applicable to your subject which means you are on the right path. A format including sub-headers would be a good place to start improving. IndigoSpranger (talk) 03:22, 24 October 2017 (UTC)

You make good use of secondary sources to explain the circumstances of the lynching. Be careful not to quote a source without using quotations and citations. The addition of a "structure" to the article, with headings, subheadings etc. is needed. I can help you with formatting and citations, just let me know. Nice topic!Goldsteinmj (talk) 21:08, 24 October 2017 (UTC)

Not to beat a dead horse, but at this point it seems like structure is the main thing needed. It's rather hard to follow what you currently have because, generally, it reads as a block of text. Once sorted through, I think that your content is rather good. Further diction variation could benefit the article, but very nice job! Haassr (talk) 22:07, 24 October 2017 (UTC)

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I really liked the quote box, I did not know that was a thing on wiki. Making clear section titles would improve this article, as well as making a references section for all of the sources. Overall, it's coming along nicely. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jennifer.cerer (talk • contribs) 02:45, 23 October 2017 (UTC)

You have a lot of good info that just needs more structure. You should check the library for more sources. There is a pretty sizable section with books about lynching and there are more ebooks available on the library database. Try playing around with the different wiki features to get the subheadings and citations. To double check before you publish you can always use the "Show preview" feature and then make adjustments as needed. Bankstonad (talk) 21:56, 23 October 2017 (UTC)