User talk:Allyborghi/sandbox
I think it is helpful that you gave the literal and casual meaning of the word. I think that’ll be helpful to readers who really don’t know much about the term at all. I also think it’s really useful that you have links to a handful of other wikipedia articles. I think the article would be improved if you included a few more citations. For instance, when you share its origins from the BLM movement in 2014, I think that should be cited. I like how you chronologically track the usage of the term since its first documented use! When you explain what it means to be “woke” in the second paragraph of the pop culture section, I think that there is room to expand its definition (for instance, I associate being informed and well-read on social justice issues a qualification to be “woke”). You have a good amount of examples from pop culture and maintain a neutral tone! Watkina (talk) 22:22, 8 March 2017 (UTC)
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editHey, I really liked your topic because I think it's very relevant today. I have seen the word used in many contexts on campus and around social media, so it's good that you're attempting to address its history and relevance to society's issues.
Here are a few things you can adjust to make your contribution better:
-For the definition section, cite the source for "woke" at the end of each sentence. Also, clarify "past of wake" with "past tense of wake. "Additionally, I would also suggest linking the UrbanDictionary and the Oxford Dictionary to their respective Wikipedia pages so that readers could have access to learn more about those two sources.
-I suggest re-titling your second section "Origins of Woke." Also, the last sentence is repetitive.
-Your popular culture section has some good examples, but I would suggest either cutting a few out or making each example more clear in its own paragraphs.
-Overall, I think you have solid content, but it just needs to be proofread so that it is clearer to read and understand. Additionally, add more sources so you can back up the information you have contributed.
If you have any questions, please reach out to me on my talk page: Abamzai. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Abamzai (talk • contribs) 19:55, 9 March 2017 (UTC)