User talk:Alexkeft/sandbox
Peer Review edit
Hi Alex!
This is a really great and informative article. I especially enjoy the statistics and concrete evidence you use to support your statements. in terms of the "More countries" section, I think your article would be more effective if it had more concrete examples of these countries' cultures and eating habits, and their effect on the general population's health. This could lead to a better explanation of how American culture became so different and why these countries should be models. Also, since your article is more focused on American eating habiits, making that more clear in your title would be helpful to someone seeking specific information on this subject. Your "Improving Eating Habits" section was my favorite. All of the information was well-supported, clear, and included possible solutions. I think expanding on the "Individual Strategies", through adding examples that can be achieved at all/most socio-economic levels, and "Policy" sections would make an excellent article even better!
Arestifo21 (talk) 03:44, 3 November 2016 (UTC)Alessandra