User talk:Akandru/sandbox

Latest comment: 3 years ago by Angelalin79 in topic Comments

I really liked this article. The article had a nice flow to it and really made the topic understandable to me despite my lack of knowledge of the issue. Definitions of terms from credible sources that weren’t too complex were super helpful. As I mentioned above, links would make the article even better once you move the article out of your sandbox. Also, I think the lead section could mention a bit more about the topics to come but I guess that may just be a personal preference. Otherwise, I really liked the article and I think this is definitely an important contribution to Wikipedia. Yowashi23 (talk) 02:33, 29 October 2020 (UTC)Reply

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The article does well in its comprehensiveness and addressing the most important topics regarding black maternal mortality in the United states. I would suggest further explaining the studies that you cite, and expanding upon the lead section. Overall, great work! -Angelalin79 (talk) 20:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)Reply