Hi A,

Your additions to this article definitely give more dimension this section. I'm not sure if you were planning to interweave your additions into the existing paragraph. I think it would be helpful to combine the information in the existing paragraph and yours and then restructure it to show all of the effects (crime, employment, health, demographics, socio-economic).

Also, you may want to restructure your sentences that use the phrase "some argue" to help control bias.

Good start! I look forward to reading the final version.

Lesley

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