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Add to an article comment from Sarah

While the source and content are good, it duplicates part of what was written just below your contribution.--198.48.224.245 (talk) 21:43, 8 March 2019 (UTC)

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Feedback Paulkong (talk) 23:46, 27 February 2019 (UTC)

it is not clear which references support which statements. Try adding the reference to the end of the statement. Also, i noticed some of the references were videos, are these a reputable source? Can you provide proof that 80% of sand comes from eroding mountains? Where you ask 'how is sand formed?' try replacing it with a subheading called 'Sand Formation' and where you ask ' is sand different from different sources?' you could similarly have another sub heading titled ' Types of Sand and Sources ' or similar. Wnere you say desert sand is useless, what is your reasoning or what evidence suggests that? Try expanding on the differences in Desert Sand which make it 'useless' and maybe make it a subsection too! If there is no 'Uses' Section in sand you should definately add one, but if uses vary depending on type then you should take that into consideration. Making glass out of sand might be a reason that sand is important, but i would avoid going into a great deal of detail on 'glass production' when your topic is 'sand'. How thin is the thin layer of sand in the ocean? find a reference for that, and another one to indicate that loss of that thin layer would be ecologically disruptive. Paulkong (talk) 23:46, 27 February 2019 (UTC)

Response to Feedback from Paulkong (talk) 23:46, 27 February 2019 (UTC) PaulKong

Thank you for your peer review. I will try to find better sources, which are not videos. I will also refine the titles of the subheadings and make sure to show which facts go with each source. The suggestions you made for other topics are good and I will research them further. Thanks again! 1smithmon (talk) 00:28, 5 March 2019 (UTC)

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