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Article Evaluation The Wikipedia page for Wand (band), one of my favorite bands is good, but incomplete. The article is fairly thorough in its album summations, however the portion of the article that talks about side projects for band members is incomplete. I think it is good that it is there, because it allows Wikipedia users to find similar bands by relatively unknown artists who can be hard to track. That said, it could use improvement. For example, Cory Hanson, the lead singer and guitarist in Wand also worked on a band called GØGGS with Ty Segall. In all likelihood, other members of Wand have side projects as well. Links to outside sources are functional. Since this is an indie band, there aren't entirely reputable sources about it; the article relies on alternative music magazines that have published interviews or articles about Wand, which are appropriate in this context. This article did not have a talk page so I started one: Talk:Wand (band).

Add to an Article I added this to the article Illinois:

"Dix came into this effort after having met J.O. King, a Jacksonville, Illinois businessman, who invited her to Illinois where he had been working to build an asylum for the insane. With the lobbying expertise of Dix, plans for the Jacksonville State Hospital (now known as the Jacksonville Developmental Center) were signed into law on March 1, 1847."

The addition (if still up) is at the end of the section on pre-Civil War history of Illinois.

Article Draft - Ty Segall

New "Early life" section:

Segall is the adopted son of a Laguna Beach, California family; his father is a lawyer and his mother, an artist. Segall's first love was surfing, a sport his father taught him at age ten, however in high school, the object of his love became records. After a neighborhood girl who was moving away gifted Segall a stack of Black Sabbath and Alice Cooper LPs, he was hooked. Segall describes his teenage self as emotionally unstable, a "very existential eighteen-year-old drinker," whose instability was temporarily mended by the escapism music provided him. After high school, Segall attended the University of San Francisco where he received a degree in Media Studies. After graduating, he worked eight months constructing grow boxes for cannabis plants, but since then has been focused entirely on music.

New paragraph under heading: "Ty Segall and The Freedom Band":

In the album, Segall displays his ability to play the full repertoire of rock; in one album he goes from T. Rex (band) style glam rock, to Bob Dylan-esque country rock, to the breadth and social commentary of Pink Floyd, to hardcore punk, to a jam band sound. Segall describes the record as a "song album," one without a singular concept or sound. The ten-minute-long centerpiece of the album is "Warm Hands (Freedom Returned)," which starts with Segall's characteristic punk-inspired thrashing guitar, but becomes open and spacey around the five-minute mark, before reprising the melody from "Freedom" (the second track on the album). Comparisons have been drawn between this most recent album and Segall's 2012 release Twins, which was also a compilation of Segall's various influences and styles.