Original: According to the website Stop Cyberbullying, "Cyberbullying is when a child, preteen, or teen is tormented, threatened, harassed, humiliated, embarrassed or otherwise targeted by another child, preteen or teen using the Internet, interactive and digital technologies or mobile phones."
New: According to the website Stop Cyberbullying, "Cyberbullying is when anyone is tormented, threatened, harassed, humiliated, embarrassed or otherwise targeted by another child, preteen or teen using the Internet, interactive and digital technologies or mobile phones."
Reason: I changed the words in bold to "anyone" since cyber bullying can happen at any age and this makes it seem as though it can only happen to a younger generation.
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Original: Some children act proactively but only show aggression to defend themselves if they are provoked, while others react aggressively if they are provoked but tend to never be the ones to attack first.
New: Some children act proactively but will show aggression to defend themselves if provoked. These children will react aggressively but tend to never be the ones to attack first.
Reason: I made these changes because the original seemed to run-on and didn't make much sense when read aloud.
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Original: This can involve physical, emotional, verbal, and cyberbullying. For an act to be considered bullying it must meet certain criteria, hostile intent, imbalance of power, repetition, distress, and provocation. When bullying occurs there are many effects that a person can undergo. On a wide spectrum from anger, depression, stress to suicide.
New: For an act to be considered bullying it must meet certain criteria. This includes hostile intent, imbalance of power, repetition, distress, and provocation. Bullying can have a wide spectrum of effects on a student including, but not limited to, anger, depression, stress and suicide.
Reason: This article stated that the intro paragraph was not adequately summarizing the articles content. I added more about what the author wrote about later in the article and rearranged the wording.
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