ThatRandomGuyOffTheStreet

Hello, and thank you for visiting my user page. I am a running start student hoping to get my last high school requirements out of the way and get an early start on a college degree. I plan to study music, and to become a music teacher, since music is one of my biggest passions. I mainly play trombone, but I also play piano and plan on learning guitar soon.

If I were to get more involved in adding to or writing about for Wikipedia, I would spend most of my time writing about musicians, especially those that aren't the biggest in the public eye. Certainly not people that nobody would know, but people that may be fairly well known outside of mainstream that are just obscure enough to not have somewhere on Wikipedia with information about them.

Article Critique

I visited the Tony Hawk in Boom Boom Sabotage page on Wikipedia, and found three aspects of it worth commenting on: the singular dead citation, the informal voice in the plot summary, and the lack of detail in the plot summary.

Citation

The page only uses one citation for the article, for the statement in the Awards section of the article. The link may have previously led to the website for the Canadian Awards for the Electronic & Animated Arts, but now it leads to a site showing the domain for sale. The article should use more citations, and citations that are still in use.

Informal Voice

The plot summary uses very informal language, putting ellipses in inappropriate places, and giving off the feeling of what you'd find on the back of a DVD box. It should be rewritten to be closer to an encyclopedia. Other articles with plot summaries will be more sophisticated, and is written more to explain rather than to entice, which is what it feels like this plot summary is attempting to do.

Completeness

The plot summary is very bare bones in comparison to many movie summaries on Wikipedia. Movie plot summaries usually feature more detail than is featured in this, giving a few paragraphs to summarize the events within the story, rather than giving a three sentence explanation of the premise.

Summary

This page is very small, and could use more information overall, with citations to come with it. The article is passable for learning the most basic basics about the movie, assuming that the information is accurate, but it would benefit from more information, as more information could help with the informal feeling of the plot summary, and would make for a more complete Wikipedia article. The inclusion of more citations to back up the information that is provided would also help greatly with the reliability of the article.

(I also made an edit here as a part of the assignment)