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Article Problems edit
Art and World War II edit
Lead Section
- More intro than summary
- Too much information
- Not concise; doesn’t overview topic
- Needs images
- Only 1 citation
- Page title not in first sentence
- Link to WWII & art sooner
- More encyclopedic
Layout Problems
- Sections are in confusing order
- Suggested new sections:
- Destruction of Art
- War-Inspired Art
- Artists in the War
- Within new sections, there can be more accessible subsections (with info in current sections)
Content Problems
- Original research/personal essay style needs to be altered (especially in first section)
- Needs more images throughout article
- Add more citations throughout
- Style needs to be more neutral
Horrible Histories (book series) edit
Lead Problems
- Good lead overall
- Last paragraph unnecessary (can be a section later on)
- Needs info box
Layout Problems
- Not sure if the lists and lists of books is necessary for this specific article (separate page?)
- Not enough subsections
- Development & Approach sections could potentially be combined (Concept & Creation?)
- New section about publication history (move Translations section & other content here)
- Add Awards as a subsection in the Reception section
Content Problems
- The excessive Reception section needs to be condensed.
- Some copyediting required throughout – grammar, spelling, style, tone, and similar errors.
- Original research/personal essay style & subjective tones need to be altered
Junie B. Jones edit
Lead Problems
- Needs more in the info box
- Needs images
- Needs more information in lead paragraph to be considered a summary
Layout Problems
- Too much time spent on character descriptions (new page for characters?)
- Missing a number of sections on series creation, reception, publication history, etc.
Content Problems
- Some copyediting required throughout – grammar, spelling, style, tone, and similar errors.
- References need to be added in a majority of the character analyses.
- Some excessive and unnecessary details need to be condensed.
- More general info about the book series, in general, needs to be added.
Potential Articles to Edit edit
Act (drama) edit
Art and World War II edit
Donald Duck Universe edit
Horrible Histories (book series) edit
Junie B. Jones edit
Articles Needing Improvement edit
Coffee Cake edit
- Article flagged as needing more citations
- Article needs to be verified
- Article is lacking quite a bit of content
Bird Food edit
- Article flagged as needing changes in tone
- Article seems to casual
- Article's layout needs to be reorganized