Biography edit
Born and raised in Mexico, moved to Canton, MI in 2003. Not sure what to do with my life, I enlisted in the United States Navy in 2006 as a Hospital Corpsman. I spent six years in Okinawa, Japan where I became fascinated with modifying and drifting mid 90’s Japanese cars. I moved to Everett in October 2018 after being medically discharged from the Navy. I am currently living with my best friend, and I work part-time while pursuing a degree in Welding.
The main things that interest me about Wikipedia are the links included within each article. When I look up a subject, I tend to click links within the article and end up going down a “rabbit hole”. I want to learn more about new and alternative treatments for post-traumatic stress disorder (PTSD) so I can have an intelligent conversation with others on the talk page. I would also like to write about older Japanese cars by contributing specific details about the older cars I have owned. Scumbagpancake (talk) 16:48, 29 April 2019 (UTC)
Okinawa Prefecture Article Evaluation edit
I visited the Okinawa prefecture page on Wikipedia, and found three aspects of it worth commenting on: The language and culture portion of the article needs additional citations, I found a dead link in the history section, and a popular local superhero was not mentioned in the notable people portion of the article.
Dead References edit
The 2007- present history portion of the article cites a poll from 2007 stating that 85% of the Okinawan population is opposed to the United States military. One of the references listed for this opposition is an article talking about crowding of military personnel in Okinawa. The link leads to a dead (404 not found) article published in the Japan Teacher's Union website[1].
Additional Citations Needed edit
The language and culture portion of the article has a banner warning readers that additional citations are needed. In the other cultural characteristics portion of the article, a paragraph states that "the fabric named bingata, is made in workshops on the main island and elsewhere". While a link was provided for the word bingata, no references were provided for where the bingata is made.
Notable People edit
Under the notable people section of the article, a popular superhero from Okinawa was left out of the spotlight. Ryujin Mabuyer is a tokusatsu (live action television drama) about a young man named Kanai. In the beginning of the TV series, Kanai becomes possessed with a local spirit and gains superpowers that he uses to fight evil. The show is very popular in Okinawa as it promotes good values to children, and it contains many local details about the island that many Okinawa residents can relate to[2]. The opening song for the TV show[3] was performed by a local rock band named Murasaki[4].
Conclusion edit
In my opinion, the Okinawa prefecture article is very well written. While looking for information about local events and culture in Okinawa, I realized there is a limited amount of reliable resources in English. I believe residents of Okinawa who are fluent in English could fill in the gaps in the article. Scumbagpancake (talk) 16:32, 29 April 2019 (UTC)
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