User:Pktka/Sexual differentiation/TanishaT Peer Review

Peer review

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General info

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Lead

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  • Updates to the lead provide the article with a more streamlined, concise, and universal introduction that is not anthropocentric (i.e. clarification that developmental sequence "from embryo into fetuses, into infants, children, adolescents, and eventually into adults" is specific to humans).
  • I agree that the last paragraph pertaining to humans is not necessary in the lead and would be more effective in a the Humans subheading. It also lacks citations on a whole and should likely just be removed or augmented with appropriate citations.
  • Lead could benefit from minor foreshadowing/introduction of the content provided in the subsequent sections.


Content

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  • Lability of Sexual Differentiation subheading could potentially be renamed as it does not easily convey what information will be provided.
    • Addition of the Alternative Morphs section is very well constructed and is essential for a comprehensive understanding of the topic. This section could potentially be placed as a subsection of the Lability section.
  • Sections are not overloaded with information but provide just enough to understand the essentials.
    • Great use of redirecting Wikipedia links to provide the reader with additional information.
  • In the Brain Differentiation section, the explanation of the role of sexual selection could be expanded, as well as a corresponding link to sexual selection main Wikipedia's article.

Tone and Balance

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  • Tone is neutral
  • Does not assert absolute certainty, which is important for a developing area of research, but provides the reader with clear indications of the variation and alternate pathwyas that are possible.

Sources and References

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  • All updated information is correctly cited with relevant and functioning links.

Organization

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  • Writing is clear and concise.
  • Avoids use of excessive jargon terms so information can be easily understood
  • Overall organization allows information to be quickly located


Guiding questions:

  • Overall, fantastic improvements to original article
  • Provides much more contemporary information regarding sexual differentiation systems while maintaining a neutral and balanced tone
  • Could benefit from a few additional examples for each system or under the lability section to put information into context