User:Miranda/Hurricane Karen (2007)

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1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): (minor)

3. It is broad in its coverage

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   a (fair representation): b (all significant views): (see references)

5. It is stable.
6. It contains images, where possible, to illustrate the topic.

   a (tagged and captioned): b (lack of images does not in itself exclude GA): N/A c (non-free images have fair use rationales): N/A

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GA Review for Hurricane Karen (2007)

General Notes

Issue addressed miranda 00:53, 1 January 2008 (UTC)

• Try to avoid using "it"
• In a compound sentence, the sentence is "SV, and SV". When there are multiple verbs, the sentence should read "SV and V" without a comma.

Introduction/Lead

Issue addressed miranda 01:08, 1 January 2008 (UTC)

• Per WP:LEAD, articles <15K can have one paragraph.
• Try to avoid using the word "it"
• Hurricane Karen was the eleventh named storm and fourth hurricane of the 2007 Atlantic hurricane season.

Might want to shorten the sentence to "was the fourth hurricane" with the hyperlink on hurricane. There are many different types of "storms". Not an issue. miranda 21:59, 30 December 2007 (UTC)

• It was a Cape Verde-type hurricane that developed in the eastern tropical Atlantic out of a large tropical wave, and briefly reached Category 1 hurricane intensity before it slowly weakened due to increased wind shear.

This is a run on. May want to break the sentence up into two before "and briefly".

• It was never a threat to land.

May want to take the sentence out. Kind of personal knowledge

• Additional comment - May want to say how long the storm lasted. Like: The storm lasted X days.

Storm History

Neutral - This never really was an issue, just a suggestion. miranda 22:01, 30 December 2007 (UTC)

• May want to split into two sections: (before and after)

First Paragraph

Issue addressed (weak) I had to do some copyediting. miranda 00:58, 1 January 2008 (UTC)

• It was not well-organized with only scattered thunderstorm activity, but had a large area of low pressure associated with it.

Take out the word it. For the subject replace "The hurricane".

• May want to provide one or two sentences on the previous hurricane.
• As the system tracked westward south of Cape Verde, deep convection gradually increased and curved banding features became defined, as well as a poorly-defined circulation.

X and Y, and Z should be X, Y, and Z

• Take out "thereafter"
• Little change in organization took place thereafter until the evening of September 24, when the low-level circulation and banding features became better defined as the system tracked west-northwest.

Wordy. Please break this up into two sentences

• The Dvorty estimates: Please reveal to me and the reader what they found out with the results.
• Only one cite for this paragraph.
• Please hyperlink tropical depression to let the reader know what a tropical depression is.

Second Paragraph

Issue addressed miranda 00:59, 1 January 2008 (UTC)

The depression quickly intensified into early on September 25 as the system continued to organize, and was upgraded to Tropical Storm Karen that morning.[2]

• During the morning of September 25, the tropical depression quickly intensified while continuing to organize. In the same morning, the storm was upgraded to Tropical Storm Karen.[2]

The "tropical depression"; also I don't like the wording of this sentence. Please change it to the above.

I corrected some run-ons in this paragraph.

Third Paragraph

Issue addressed miranda 01:00, 1 January 2008 (UTC)

• At the same time, the center of circulation became exposed at times due to the southwesterly wind shear, with an unusual wind field in that the strongest winds were recorded well to the east and to the northwest of the center.[8]

Wordy.

• Some of the vorticity from Karen's remnants may have been responsible for the development of the short-lived Tropical Depression Fifteen on October 11.[14]

This should belong in the section labeled "impact".

Impact

Issue addressed miranda 01:03, 1 January 2008 (UTC)

• with one forecaster noting a 5% probability for the cyclone

I looked at the source, and the source said ".5%"

• However, Karen remained in the open Atlantic Ocean during its lifespan and never affected any land areas; no damage or casualties were reported.

Any news reports to back this up? This is kind of OR.

References

Issue addressed miranda 22:03, 30 December 2007 (UTC)

• Can you find other sources other than the Weather Service?

I added a Reuters cite. miranda 21:54, 30 December 2007 (UTC)

Decision

Due to the evaluation above, I decided to put this GA nom on hold. You have seven days (Dec. 31) to improve this article. After the elapsed time period, I will re-assess to see if any improvement has been made to the article. miranda 01:44, 24 December 2007 (UTC)

Post-Analysis Decision (7/0/1)

Seven out of eight (with one neutral) issues have been addressed and corrected. Thus, this article is promoted to GA status. Congrats! miranda 01:12, 1 January 2008 (UTC)