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Article Critique: NSA Bahrain edit
Article review edit
Being stationed in Bahrain for over two years, i saw two sides to Naval Support Activity Bahrain. However, i was curious in learning more about it and the history. I visited the Naval Support Activity Bahrain page on Wikipedia, and found three aspects of it worth commenting on: Its lack of history of the base, the lack of citations, and and the lack of up to date information.
History edit
The page sites some history on how the base has come about, but it has no present history, besides of an investigation that happened over 10 years ago. Along with having no up to date history of the base, they have no information on buildings nor any list of recreational activities. The page also fails to list the other parts of the base connected to Naval Station Activity Bahrain. That said, i know that much of the base is made up of master-at-arms and third country nationals but also has many other military rates and civilians who also work on the base, and i do not see that mentioned in the article.
Citations edit
The page list some citations, but barely any. Under references, there were five citations listed, three of which were linked to a dead page. It would lead you to the Navy Times website, but insist that there was an error. Upon discovering the dead citations, the other two citations were not related to information of the base, besides the investigation that had happened in the kennel portion of the base. When stating the history of the base, the page did not use any citations, which makes me think where the information came from.
Age edit
The article itself has been updated within this year, however the citations are seven to eights years old. Upon reading the page, it was noticed that there was no updated history about the present base. If more updated information was updated in the article it could make it more credible.
Summary edit
All in all, I would rate this page as "okay." The history and information that was presented in this page was fairly decent, but what was cited was not that relevant. In the history portion of the page, all the facts stated were not cited (all but one, which was not relevant to the base). There are many pieces of information left out of this page, which would benefit learning more about Naval Station Activity Bahrain.