Template:Did you know nominations/Who Ya Gonna Call?

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The result was: promoted by — Maile (talk) 18:56, 28 February 2014 (UTC)

Who Ya Gonna Call? edit

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~~... that the Psych episode "Who Ya Gonna Call?" focuses on a man who is unknowingly also a woman and a violent murderer?~~

Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Aphaenogaster praerelicta
Comment: I honestly don't know what the status of this is. In 2007, it was a 9kb copy-vio plot-only article, which was redirected that year. I built the article in my userspace (here) and then copied and pasted it over the redirect.

Moved to mainspace by Awardgive (talk). Self nominated at 22:35, 17 February 2014 (UTC).

@Awardgive: I think this looks great - a comprehensive and very well-referenced new article on a notable topic, with an interesting hook . I'd like you to do two things for me though before this is promoted though - 1) please provide the exact source that supports the hook, I'm sure it's in the article I'm just having a little bit of trouble finding it. 2) This needs a copyedit for prose issues, as the current prose is very clunky and full of lots of short declarative sentences: e.g. "...who claim to operate a psychic detective agency. It is actually based on Shawn's hyperobservant ability. In the episode, an obviously disturbed man requests help from the two, believing that he is being haunted. Upon investigation, they decide it is actually the man's ex-girlfriend, but find she is engaged and could not be the "ghost"". You have written lots of short sentences which means the prose doesnt really flow that well. At all. Do you see? :) The prose section is full of this e.g.: " Returning to Robert's house, they look for him. Instead of finding him, they discover a secret room in the attic, which is filled with women's clothing and accessories. Shawn realizes that Robert is Regina Kane, and that he unknowingly suffers from multiple personality disorder. They find Robert, and trigger his "Regina" personality, but it turns out not to be violent." I'd suggest either working on it yourself or if you'd like a hand submitting a request at the Guild of Copyeditors, posting a request on the talkpages of WikiProject Comedy and WikiProject Television or by asking another editor, especially one who is interested in this TV show; for now, I've added a {{copyedit}} tag to the article. I hope you find this review helpful, and if these issues are sorted out then it would be great to put this on the main page; I'm sure it'll get loads of views with a hook like this! :) Acather96 (click here to contact me) 19:00, 18 February 2014 (UTC)

1.) The hook is from the plot section, which is specifically sourced to the episode summary from USA Network and, like the majority of TV episode articles, is indirectly sourced to the episode itself. 2.) I went through and attempted a copyedit, focusing on the lead and plot sections. I tried to combine or expand any sentence I thought was too brief and didn't flow well. Thanks for the review, - Awardgive. Help out with Project Fillmore County 05:28, 19 February 2014 (UTC)

@Awardgive: -

Thank-you, this looks excellent now. Approved, this is good to go! Acather96 (click here to contact me) 22:39, 24 February 2014 (UTC)

Unfortunately, the hook violates an important rule (WP:DYKSG#C6): "If the subject is a work of fiction or a fictional character, the hook must involve the real world in some way." (The name of the show and episode don't count.) I'm afraid that a new hook is necessary; I've struck the original one. BlueMoonset (talk) 03:48, 25 February 2014 (UTC)

IMO, BlueMoon's issue can be resolved with minor rewording to clarify the context. To wit:

ALT1: ... that a major character in "Who Ya Gonna Call?", an episode of the comedy-drama TV series Psych, is a man who is unknowingly also a woman and a violent murderer?

I didn't review the article or source, so I'm adding an AGF tick due to the earlier review. --Orlady (talk) 20:39, 27 February 2014 (UTC)