Template:Did you know nominations/Udvada Atash Behram
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The result was: promoted by PanydThe muffin is not subtle 13:43, 12 May 2015 (UTC)
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Udvada Atash Behram
edit- ... that the Udvada Atash Behram (pictured) is the most sacred of the Zoroastrian fire temples in India and the oldest continuously burning fire-temple fire in the world?
Created by Nvvchar (talk). Self-nominated at 01:21, 12 April 2015 (UTC).
The interesting article is new (it was created on 11th April 2015) and long enough. However, the present form of the hook cannot be verified. According to the article, Udvada Atash Behram is said to be the oldest continuously burning fire-temple. Furthermore, that sentence in the article seems to have been taken from a self-published source. I think the whole article should be copyedited and the hook whould be shortened. Borsoka (talk) 02:54, 4 May 2015 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review. Copy edited. Shortened hook as ALT1 proposed.
- ALT1 Hook ... that the Udvada Atash Behram (pictured) is the most sacred of the Zoroastrian fire temples in India?--Nvvchar. 05:55, 4 May 2015 (UTC)
- @Borsoka: I am confused. Will this be OK!
- ALT2 Hook ... that the Atash Bahram, meaning the "Victorious Fire", is housed in the Udavada temple (pictured) built in 1742 CE?--Nvvchar. 06:17, 5 May 2015 (UTC)
- Sorry. When writing the first comment I did not realize that neither the first part of the hook was verified by an inline citation. As to ALT2, I have not found a reference in the article to the meaning of Atash Bahram ("Victorious Fire"). Borsoka (talk) 02:43, 7 May 2015 (UTC)
- I have now fixed a reference immediately after the definition.--Nvvchar. 02:57, 7 May 2015 (UTC)
, as I mentioned above, the hook seems to cite a self-published source. I suggest that a peer-reviewed source should be added to the relevant texts in the article. I also suggest that the hook should be copyedited (... that the Atash Bahram ("Victorious Fire") is housed in the Udavada temple (pictured) which was built in 1742 CE?). Borsoka (talk) 04:28, 7 May 2015 (UTC)
- Sorry. When writing the first comment I did not realize that neither the first part of the hook was verified by an inline citation. As to ALT2, I have not found a reference in the article to the meaning of Atash Bahram ("Victorious Fire"). Borsoka (talk) 02:43, 7 May 2015 (UTC)
- ALT3: ... that in 1742, Zoroastrians built the Udvada Atash Behram (pictured) and moved their sacred fire to it? --Rosiestep (talk)
- @Borsoka:. I could not rectify by replacing with book and other reliable sources as Google book was giving an error report of "500" for several days. Google search is now functioning normally and I have now removed the self sources of the Heritage organization and repalced with book and other reliable sources. This has resulted in some small changes and few additions of text. Please see. The hook could be ALT3 as suggested by Rosiestep. --Nvvchar. 07:27, 10 May 2015 (UTC)