Template:Did you know nominations/Tim George, Jr.

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The result was: promoted by – Muboshgu (talk) 18:40, 10 February 2012 (UTC)

Tim George, Jr.

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George at Road America in 2010.

Created/expanded by The Bushranger (talk). Self nom at 09:57, 1 February 2012 (UTC)

  • New article is long enough (2028 characters); the hook checks, is interesting, well under 200 characters, and referenced; article in-line citations checked and texts compared; maintains NPOV; QPQ completed. The one problem is in the article itself, in the "Personal life and early career" section: the statement that George "walked out after being criticized for altering a recipe" is inaccurate. When I read it, I interpreted "walked out" to mean he quit on the spot, a common meaning for the phrase. The New York Times article being cited says otherwise: "took a break to watch sleek Ferraris conquer the racetrack". I recommend rewriting the sentence so it makes a better connection between his catering at the race, taking the break, seeing the cars, and that leading to his starting racing school later that year. Once that's done, this should be good to go. BlueMoonset (talk) 17:38, 2 February 2012 (UTC)
  • I wasn't quite sure how to put all that in without it sounding slightly awkward (at least to my Mountain Dew-fueled brain), so I reworded it a bit in an alternative fashion, hope it works. :) - The Bushranger One ping only 17:44, 2 February 2012 (UTC)
  • Article problem now fixed; this DYK nomination is a go.
Your revision of the sentence was closer but not quite there, so I gave it a crack myself: I felt it was important to explain how the chef's criticism led to Tim racing, so added him watching the cars race followed by racing school. Hope you think it works! BlueMoonset (talk) 18:23, 2 February 2012 (UTC)
You done good - thanks! :) - The Bushranger One ping only 20:45, 2 February 2012 (UTC)
  • Newly added photo is used in the article's infobox, is available from Commons with appropriate reuse provisions, and shows up well enough. (Better than the DYK image on the front page now, so I figure this one's fine.) BlueMoonset (talk) 21:50, 3 February 2012 (UTC)