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The result was: promoted by 97198 (talk) 08:32, 19 August 2014 (UTC)

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John Hay

  • ... that John Hay (pictured) may not have become ambassador or US Secretary of State had he taken credit for The Bread-Winners?

5x expanded by Wehwalt (talk). Nominated by Crisco 1492 (talk) at 01:15, 1 August 2014 (UTC).

  • Consider
though it gets a bit clunky there at the end with the commas. EEng (talk) 15:44, 1 August 2014 (UTC)
  • I was considering mentioning the Lincoln connection, but I think it's not 100% relevant as Lincoln was almost twenty years previously. Mind, I don't have any issue with mentioning him - though I'd recommend an alternative phrasing. Or maybe something different altogether, like
ALT3:... that John Hay (pictured), former secretary to Abraham Lincoln, was not credited as the author of The Bread-Winners (1883) for over thirty years? — Crisco 1492 (talk) 17:59, 1 August 2014 (UTC)
FWIW, I can't make sense of alt 3, its time element ("in 1883 ... for over thirty years") is confusing. Cbl62 (talk) 01:06, 2 August 2014 (UTC)
  • That's what I get for writing when half asleep. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 03:27, 2 August 2014 (UTC)
ALT3 is best. EEng (talk) 04:08, 2 August 2014 (UTC)
  • Reading this again, I realized that ALT3 may be misunderstood (he was not credited in the book, although his wife admitted it in 1907). How about
ALT4: ... that copies of The Bread-Winners (1883) did not credit the author, former secretary to Abraham Lincoln John Hay (pictured), for over thirty years?  — Crisco 1492 (talk) 08:22, 3 August 2014 (UTC)
  • "Crediting" doesn't have to be in the work itself -- it can just be through general knowledge. However, you might try acknowledged:
ALT5:... that John Hay (pictured), former secretary to Abraham Lincoln, was not acknowledged as the author of The Bread-Winners (1883) for over thirty years?

EEng (talk) 02:44, 4 August 2014 (UTC)

  • "'Crediting' doesn't have to be in the work itself" - Hence the inclusion of "copies of" (i.e. the book). Alt5 is fine too. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 04:06, 4 August 2014 (UTC)

Review please! I hope no one minds my striking alts 1, 2, 3. I'd like to strike the OH too but not sure all are OK with that. EEng (talk) 22:31, 10 August 2014 (UTC)

How about:

ALT6: ... that there was nationwide speculation about who wrote The Bread-Winners (1883), but its author, John Hay, never admitted it? — --Wehwalt (talk) 22:35, 10 August 2014 (UTC)

Good direction to go in. If I may...

ALT7: ... that there was nationwide speculation as to the authorship of The Bread-Winners (1883) but its true author, John Hay, never acknowledged it?

EEng (talk) 23:11, 10 August 2014 (UTC)

  • ALT7 is good to me. Sure, feel free to strike the others. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:54, 10 August 2014 (UTC)
  • I don't like the repeat of "authorship" and "author".--Wehwalt (talk) 00:56, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
  • Second author --> writer? — Crisco 1492 (talk) 01:24, 11 August 2014 (UTC)

Yeah I thought of that too but I was uncharacteristically lazy.

ALT8: ... that despite nationwide speculation, John Hay never acknowledged authorship of his The Bread-Winners, published anonymously in 1883?

I don't like his the but there's something evil about this nomination and no matter what I do every hook has some weird thing in it. So in an excess of completeness here's another

ALT9: ... that despite nationwide speculation, John Hay (pictured) never acknowledged his authorship of The Bread-Winners, published anonymously in 1883?

That omits explicit statement that Hay was the actual author but it's sufficiently implicit, I think. Take your pick. Remember, though, I start charging once we're in the double-digits.EEng (talk) 02:15, 11 August 2014 (UTC)

I'm OK with ALT9.--Wehwalt (talk) 09:55, 11 August 2014 (UTC)

Quick! Someone review before anything happens! (Do you guys want to strike any of the others?) EEng (talk) 13:16, 11 August 2014 (UTC)

The review sounds like a job for Belle! EEng (talk) 19:34, 16 August 2014 (UTC)
Expanded enough and recently enough; neutral (but for the mention of "vacuous town belles" which looks like a personal attack to me); assuming no copyvio, plagiarism or close paraphrasing as I can't access the sources; QPQ done; citations like shotgun holes in a road sign in [place the name of your stereotype hillbilly state of choice here]. Hook refined to death and cited. Picture fine (grumpy old man says "No, you look like a walrus!"). Plot section of the article is a bit bloated but otherwise it's a good read. Ready to go with pic and ALT9. Belle (talk) 23:53, 16 August 2014 (UTC)
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