Template:Did you know nominations/Stone Nullah Lane

The following discussion is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by PFHLai (talk) 02:58, 11 January 2014 (UTC)

Stone Nullah Lane

edit

5x expanded by Bloom6132 (talk). Self nominated at 00:12, 8 January 2014 (UTC).

Expansion is fine (27 words to 470 words on 8 January), as are length of article and hook. The second suggested hook is sourced, but I can't see a source for the laundry aspect of the first hook (although it would be more interesting with the laundry). In general the sources look fine, no sign of copyvio/close paraphrasing, and it's nicely written. A few points:
  • "After passing traveling down the street ...": either passing or travelling
  • "the stream from The Peak": better as "the Peak" or Victoria Peak, if that's what's meant.
  • "impoverished children living in squatters": living in squats?

Otherwise, it looks good. SlimVirgin (talk) 00:02, 9 January 2014 (UTC)

Thanks for the review. The laundry aspect is sourced by ref 1 at the end of the sentence. First and third points addressed. For the second point, "The Peak" is actually the mountain's proper name (along with Victoria Peak), as opposed to just "Peak". —Bloom6132 (talk) 00:27, 9 January 2014 (UTC)
Okay, thanks, I see it now; I was looking at the wrong page. Regarding "The Peak," the definite article is usually not capitalized, unless that's actually the name (as in The Hague); if you look at your source in footnote 1, it says "the Peak." But this is a minor style issue, so – good to go. SlimVirgin (talk) 00:41, 9 January 2014 (UTC)