Template:Did you know nominations/Sophia Duleep Singh

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The result was: promoted by Allen3 ^talk 13:59, 5 March 2015 (UTC)

Sophia Duleep Singh edit

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... that in 1895, Sophia (pictured, right), who later became a suffragette, was introduced as an aristocratic debutante into Buckingham Palace along with her sisters, princesses Bamba and Catherine?

ALT1: ... that in the early part of the twentieth century Sophia (pictured with her sisters) was one of the leading South Asian women who joined the suffragette movement for the cause of women's rights in Britain?
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5x expanded by Nvvchar (talk). Nominated by Nvvchar (talk) at 04:20, 6 February 2015 (UTC).

ALT2: ~~... that Sophia (pictured right), the granddaughter of the "Lion of the Punjab", joined the suffragette movement for the cause of women's rights in London?~~

shorter, and keep for women's month, --Gerda Arendt (talk) 11:56, 10 February 2015 (UTC)

Thanks, I agree with the shorter version of the hook and to keep it for the women's month. It needs to be approved still.--Nvvchar. 16:04, 10 February 2015 (UTC)

I should not review because my hook has other facts. Comment: the article contains much detail, not always clarifying what is more and what less important. Consider pruning, and combining one-sentence facts to paragraphs, --Gerda Arendt (talk) 11:28, 11 February 2015 (UTC)

Thanks. Pruned as suggested.--Nvvchar. 11:52, 11 February 2015 (UTC)

I think you have missed the most hooky fact. She was recently mentioned in a BBC documentary last night because ...

ALT3: ... that Princess Sophia Singh campaigned for women's rights outside the palace (pictured) where her godmother, Queen Victoria, had let her family live?

(I'm familiar with this as I wrote the articles for her mum and her elder sister). The article is written by an experienced editor and is more than long enough. Alt2 is fine, but I suggest that alt3 (my) is even more hooky. I guess either image would work. The article is neutral, has enough good refs and I didn't see any close paraphrasing. Do lets have this for WHMonth or Day. Thanks for this. Victuallers (talk) 17:31, 13 February 2015 (UTC)

Can someone look at my alt3 hook and confirm its OK? Victuallers (talk) 17:34, 13 February 2015 (UTC)

It's ok, but I would expect a palace to be pictured. Instead of "let her family live", you could mention that the queen was her godmother. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 20:11, 13 February 2015 (UTC)

I have added Godmother. Although this godmother bit is not just love, the family had given Victoria the Star of India Diamond and a country!

ALT4: ... that Princess Sophia Singh (pictured) campaigned for women's rights outside the palace where Queen Victoria, her godmother, had let her family live? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 09:29, 14 February 2015 (UTC)

Thats fine. I added the word "had" as the Queen had died by the time this campaigning started. Victuallers (talk) 22:21, 16 February 2015 (UTC)

Cleaned up nomination template: struck through unused hooks, replaced original image with image for ALT4. Yoninah (talk) 20:20, 18 February 2015 (UTC)