Template:Did you know nominations/Sholom Rivkin

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The result was: promoted by Casliber (talk · contribs) 12:55, 2 December 2011 (UTC)

Sholom Rivkin edit

Created/expanded by Chefallen (talk), Chandlerjoeyross (talk). Nominated by Chefallen (talk) at 16:37, 17 November 2011 (UTC)

  • Everything looks ok to me. Sources check out, date, length and hook are good. Some close paraphrasing detected but how many ways can you say "Jewish chaplain at the Veterans Administration Hospital at Jefferson Barracks"?--Mike - Μολὼν λαβέ 00:41, 18 November 2011 (UTC)
  • Close paraphrasing concerns. Examples: "Rivkin often broke new Jewish legal ground in the area of family law. In the 1980s, his decision to allow a Jewish woman to undergo in vitro fertilization influenced Jewish legal thought on medical ethics" vs "He often broke new Jewish legal ground. In the 1980s his decision to allow a St. Louis Jewish woman to undergo in vitro fertilization influenced Jewish legal thought on bioethics" and "His 22-year tenure was said to have been marked both by scholarship and caring for others" vs "His 22-year tenure was said to be marked by scholarship and caring". Nikkimaria (talk) 22:45, 18 November 2011 (UTC)
    • Edits to address the issues above and others have been made to the article in the last few days. Please re-evaluate. -- Chefallen (talk) 20:14, 21 November 2011 (UTC)
      • a couple of small segments turned up with the paraphrase checker, but they were esoteric wording and no alternative leapt out at me, so I think we're over the line. Casliber (talk · contribs) 12:55, 2 December 2011 (UTC)