- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by ~ RobTalk 01:58, 8 August 2015 (UTC)
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Sequenza VII edit
Berio in the 1970s
... that Sequenza VII by Luciano Berio (pictured) for solo oboe contains a variety of extended technique, including multiphonics, overblowing, flutter-tonguing, harmonics, and microtonal trills?
ALT1: ... that Luciano Berio's (pictured) Sequenza VII for solo oboe is accompanied by a B-natural drone which typically comes from offstage?- Reviewed: Fifth DYK nom—not sure whether QPQ is required for this one. I will review a nomination anyway.
Created by BenLinus1214 (talk). Self-nominated at 17:26, 16 July 2015 (UTC).
Detailed article with many aspects, on good sources. I am not so happy with the hooks. Can we think further? The original bombards the innocent reader with technical terms, the second says little about the oboe's part. For the average reader perhaps mention only "extended techniques" (without a list), the dedication for Holliger, and/or "a virtuosity of the intellect". Can you perhaps put that in the article and correct: that it is not only about this piece but Berio's approach to virtuosity in general? - How do you feel about an infobox, - compare The Modification and Instrumentation of a Famous Hornpipe as a Merry and Altogether Sincere Homage to Uncle Alfred? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 21:01, 3 August 2015 (UTC)
- @Gerda Arendt: Thanks for the review! I can definitely put the infobox in the article. However, I'm not sure what you want in terms of the article and hooks, so could you give me a few examples? BenLinus1214talk 02:03, 4 August 2015 (UTC)
- The problem is that if I word a hook for you I can't also review it, making things more difficult. Along the lines of ... that Luciano Berio (pictured) pursued a "virtuosity of the intellect" in his Sequenza VII for solo oboe, requesting a variety of extended techniques? - The article would have to show that phrase, with the source, and mention that it is his general approach to virtuosity,- which is true for this piece also. - Thank you for the infobox! --Gerda Arendt (talk) 14:39, 6 August 2015 (UTC)
- @Gerda Arendt: How about this one:
*ALT2: ... that the performer of Luciano Berio's (pictured) Sequenza VII must perform a variety of extended techniques and was meant to have a "virtuosity of the intellect"?- Trying to avoid "the performer must perform, in other words
*ALT3: ... Luciano Berio's (pictured) wrote Sequenza VII, using a variety of extended techniques, for a performer with a "virtuosity of the intellect"?- @Gerda Arendt: That looks really good to me! Maybe switch it around a bit though: Johanna (aka BenLinus1214)talk to me!see my work 12:03, 7 August 2015 (UTC)
- ALT4: ... that Luciano Berio (pictured) wrote Sequenza VII for a performer with a "virtuosity of the intellect", utilizing a variety of extended techniques?
ALT4 preferred, --Gerda Arendt (talk) 12:06, 7 August 2015 (UTC)
- @Gerda Arendt: That looks really good to me! Maybe switch it around a bit though: Johanna (aka BenLinus1214)talk to me!see my work 12:03, 7 August 2015 (UTC)
- @Gerda Arendt: Thanks for the review! I can definitely put the infobox in the article. However, I'm not sure what you want in terms of the article and hooks, so could you give me a few examples? BenLinus1214talk 02:03, 4 August 2015 (UTC)
