Template:Did you know nominations/Saturn Cafe

The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:05, 10 July 2018 (UTC)

Saturn Cafe edit

Saturn Cafe
Saturn Cafe

Moved to mainspace by Michael Barera (talk). Self-nominated at 06:19, 25 June 2018 (UTC).

  • Article follows the criteria. It's new, long enough (~7267 characters), neutral, and cites sources. I enjoyed reading the first hook, but unfortunately it fails on its content as a hook is supposed to be "neutral and does not focus unduly on negative aspects of living people". George W. Bush falls under WP:BLP. However, ALT1 is neutral and doesn't shine on negative aspects of a living person. Other than that, it's worthy. FunksBrother (talk) 17:55, 28 June 2018 (UTC)
  • Hi, I came by to promote this. The hook is from the company's own website, which is fine, except it does sound a bit promotional. What do you think about describing some of the fare? For example:
  • ALT2: ... that the Saturn Cafe (pictured) serves classic American diner food in an all-vegetarian menu, including breakfast burritos, club sandwiches, corndogs, burgers, and milkshakes? Yoninah (talk) 23:45, 3 July 2018 (UTC)
  • I like it, Yoninah, although perhaps it would be better if shortened to...
ALT3: ... that the Saturn Cafe (pictured) has an all-vegetarian menu inspired by classic American diner food?
What do you think? Perhaps with "consisting of" or something similar in place of "inspired by"? I'm fine with ALT2, but I think my proposal for ALT3 might be better due to its greater brevity. Michael Barera (talk) 00:07, 4 July 2018 (UTC)
  • Yes, it is shorter, and it's fine. I just felt you could do more with it, especially if you want an image slot. I would have liked to play with it, like:
  • ALT4: ... that the Saturn Cafe (pictured) serves classic American diner food without the meat and grease? Yoninah (talk) 00:10, 4 July 2018 (UTC)
That certainly works for me, Yoninah, and I agree that it is a bit more catchy and appropriate for a hook. If FunksBrother is OK with it, I think that this nomination can probably be approved. Michael Barera (talk) 18:17, 4 July 2018 (UTC)
Michael Barera, I concur. FunksBrother (talk) 18:58, 4 July 2018 (UTC)
ALT4 FunksBrother (talk) 19:38, 4 July 2018 (UTC)