Template:Did you know nominations/SFX Entertainment

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The result was: promoted by Gilderien Chat|List of good deeds 18:00, 19 May 2013 (UTC)

SFX Entertainment edit

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... that Sillerman joked that he would give up shares of his EDM promoter SFX Entertainment if people catch its staff gouging the price of wine at its nightclubs?

Reviewed: Gentleman (Psy song)

Created by ViperSnake151 (talk). Self nominated at 01:05, 17 April 2013 (UTC).

I like the article, which seems to be completely in order. The hook, however, needs some work. By only listing his surname, you make it seem as if Robert F. X. Sillerman is a well known man. I, however, have never heard of him, and I guess along with me over 95% of the population (if I may be so bold to produce an estimate). Neither would I have guessed that "EDM" stands for electronic dance music. Therefore, I propose an alternative:

ALT 1 ... that Robert F. X. Sillerman, owner of dance music promoter SFX Entertainment, joked that he would give up shares if people catch his staff gouging the price of wine at its nightclubs?

An opinion, please!—♦♦ AMBER^(ЯʘCK) 15:56, 2 May 2013 (UTC)

People might not know his name, but they've surely seen what he's been involved in. But yeah, I like the new hook. ViperSnake151 Talk 19:39, 2 May 2013 (UTC)

Just an outside opinion, but is there a more interesting angle that could be used for a hook? I mean I'm one of the resident Wiki-winos here and even I don't really see anything surprising or catchy about that hook. I mean maybe if he made it as an iron-clad guaranteed and widely publicized that fact as a reason to visit his club but just "joking" about something that is a pretty common practice in the restaurant industry (both price gouging and restuarants/clubs promising that they aren't price gouging) is kind of ho-hum. Agne ^Cheese/^Wine 20:41, 7 May 2013 (UTC)

I hear ya man, but I'm not sure the article has got anything more intriguing to offer.—♦♦ AMBER^(ЯʘCK) 20:30, 8 May 2013 (UTC)

ALT1 is okay. Article is new enough, long enough, well-referenced. My checks for close paraphrasing or copyvios turned up nothing. Hook seems to be as interesting as it's going to get. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 11:20, 19 May 2013 (UTC)