Template:Did you know nominations/Ryan Taylor (American football)

The following discussion is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: rejected by Prioryman (talk) 12:41, 25 December 2011 (UTC)

Ryan Taylor (American football) edit

Created/expanded by Skater (talk). Self nom at 15:52, 7 December 2011 (UTC)

  • This is looking like a stub to me. You have 1500 characters in 7 sections. Could you flesh this out a bit? Crisco 1492 (talk) 05:03, 16 December 2011 (UTC)
I'm working off all of the sources I could find. I have a few about his predraft I will add in tommorow, i request that this DYK not be closed just yet. However, I'd appreciate any further advice about how to further flesh it out. Regards--SKATER Is Back 05:48, 16 December 2011 (UTC)
  • One of the more obvious suggestions is to get rid of the 2006 - 2010 and Green Bay Packers subsections; it will at least make the article look better fleshed out. I am not big on sports, so I do not know of any go-to references aside from the New York Times. Crisco 1492 (talk) 05:54, 16 December 2011 (UTC)
How's it look now?--SKATER Is Back 15:32, 16 December 2011 (UTC)
  • Marking as ready for re-review. --Orlady (talk) 17:19, 16 December 2011 (UTC)
  • Hook: I've edited the hook to include the sport; as we have many British, Indian, Australian, etc. readers we should make it clear what sport he played. If you have an alternative phrasing, let me know. The new hook is long enough,
Article: New enough, long enough. It needs a bit of rewording to universalize it ("all sides of the ball?"; "all three sides of the ball"? "separate linebackers from the inside or outside"?); I've done a bit of clean-up myself. More review to follow. Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:42, 16 December 2011 (UTC)
His ranking in the drafts should probably be referenced; I don't think his full name needs to referenced, but it doesn't hurt. Reference number 1 needs a bit more information (at the very least an access date and 3 should have a publisher, to ensure verifiability. Paraphrasing checks 1, 2) suggest a bit of work on paraphrasing is necessary (not much, but stuff like "redshirted after injuring his knee in camp" can easily be rephrased).
Summary: Hold for several minor fixes (accessibility, slight paraphrasing issues, and reference formatting). Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:55, 16 December 2011 (UTC)
No action after a week. Crisco 1492 (talk) 01:30, 24 December 2011 (UTC)