Template:Did you know nominations/Rama Ravi

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The result was: promoted by BlueMoonset (talk) 05:26, 4 November 2013 (UTC)

Rama Ravi edit

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~~... that Carnatic vocalist Rama Ravi also learned Bharatanatyam from Rukmini Arundale at Kalakshetra and plays the veena and mridangam?~~

Reviewed: Kristoffer Olsson

Created by Regstuff (talk). Self nominated at 14:12, 5 October 2013 (UTC).

Article is new enough, long enough, adequately referenced, no close paraphrasing seen in sources. QPQ done. I'm just a little confused by the hook. While it may be saying something very important, as a non-Indian reader I can't understand it at all. Could you write something for a more global audience? Thanks, Yoninah (talk) 21:24, 29 October 2013 (UTC)

How about ALT1: ... that Rama Ravi is not only an Indian Carnatic vocalist, she also learned the Indian dance form Bharatanatyam, and plays two musical instruments, the veena and mridangam? Regstuff (talk) 06:55, 3 November 2013 (UTC)

OK. Hook refs verified. I would just write it less promotionally:
ALT2: ... that Rama Ravi is an Indian Carnatic vocalist who also learned the Bharata Natyam Indian dance form and plays two musical instruments, the veena and the mridangam? Yoninah (talk) 12:32, 3 November 2013 (UTC)