Template:Did you know nominations/Ohad Elimelech

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The result was: promoted by Yoninah (talk) 22:11, 26 December 2019 (UTC)

Ohad Elimelech

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Ohad Elimelech

Created by Omert33 (talk). Self-nominated at 17:10, 1 December 2019 (UTC).

  • @Omert33: New, long enough. Needs more inline citations per WP:DYK. Article not neutral due to promotional tone. IMDB and wikipedia (in whatever langauge) are not reliable sources. Otherwise AGF on sources. No copyvio detected. Hooks also come off as promotional. Words like "multifaceted", "prominent", "award-winning" are discouraged especially in Wikipedia voice. QPQ not required. buidhe 03:22, 2 December 2019 (UTC)
@Buidhe:, thanks. Fixed source regarding M.K. 22 animated series and removed superlatives. --Omer Toledano (talk) 05:48, 2 December 2019 (UTC)
@Buidhe:, added and removed citations/sources. --Omer Toledano (talk) 07:34, 2 December 2019 (UTC)

@Omert33:, Thanks. You still need in-line citation for paragraphs starting with "Ohad Elimelech was born in Nahariya" and "In 2004, Elimelech, along with Assaf Harel,". The original hook is the strongest, but at 210 characters, it's too long. Can you reword it to be shorter? buidhe 17:01, 2 December 2019 (UTC)

  • @Buidhe:, thanks for your help. I've added citations and per your request, proposed an ALT 4 hook which is essentially the original one but a bit shorter. I hope that should suffice. --Omer Toledano (talk) 17:31, 2 December 2019 (UTC)
    • ALT4 approved. If the picture is to be run it will have to wait for OTRS approval. buidhe 19:33, 2 December 2019 (UTC)