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The result was: promoted by Allen3 talk 15:53, 12 November 2012 (UTC)
Neşet Ertaş edit
... that the last will of the renowned Turkish folk singer Neşet Ertaş was to be buried at the footside of his father, also a well-known folk singer?
- Reviewed: Horne's (restaurant)
Created/expanded by CeeGee (talk). Self nom at 16:02, 27 September 2012 (UTC)
The article needs a good copyedit, as the use of English is a bit shaky throughout, and I thought care also needed to be taken regarding WP:PEACOCK. There is no such word as "footside", which is used in both hook and article. BlueMoonset (talk) 21:52, 4 October 2012 (UTC)
- I don't think the article is overly peacocky. I'll agree with some of the prose could use a copyedit, though. This should be a quick and easy cleanup. Abyssal (talk) 02:00, 5 October 2012 (UTC)
ALT-1 ... that the last will of the renowned Turkish folk singer Neşet Ertaş was to be buried at the foot end of his father, also a well-known folk singer?CeeGee 08:56, 5 October 2012 (UTC)- Reworded article and hook according to User:BlueMoonset's complaint. For the required copyedit, I kindly ask a WP-senior editor for help. Thanks in advance. CeeGee 08:56, 5 October 2012 (UTC)
- Did some copyediting. Abyssal (talk) 14:32, 5 October 2012 (UTC)
This should be good to go. Abyssal (talk) 14:06, 8 October 2012 (UTC)
- I'm sorry, but this still needs more work. The phrase "foot end of his father" is only a slight improvement; "at the foot of his father's grave" is a possible fix. There are still a large number of issues with the prose, and another copyeditor should be found to fix them. BlueMoonset (talk) 14:27, 8 October 2012 (UTC)
- Did some copyediting. Abyssal (talk) 14:32, 5 October 2012 (UTC)
ALT2 ... that the grave of Turkish folk singer Neşet Ertaş is at the foot end of his father's, as he requested in his will?
Copyedited, and according to CeeGee on my talk, I guessed right about what the sources were saying. Re-review considering ALT2 requested. Yngvadottir (talk) 17:55, 5 November 2012 (UTC)
- The article is much improved but I'm puzzled to see "foot end" still in both new hook and article even after I singled it out as substandard. Trying an ALT3 to remove the problematic phrase:
- ALT3 ... that, as requested in his will, the grave of Turkish folk singer Neşet Ertaş was placed at the foot of his father's? BlueMoonset (talk) 05:47, 7 November 2012 (UTC)
- The article is much improved but I'm puzzled to see "foot end" still in both new hook and article even after I singled it out as substandard. Trying an ALT3 to remove the problematic phrase:
- Still needs full review. Have struck earlier hooks due to their problematic phrasing. BlueMoonset (talk) 23:20, 8 November 2012 (UTC)
- Five-fold expansion, long enough, new enough when submitted. Hook fact accepted in good faith. I have rearranged ALT3 slightly but the meaning is unchanged. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 14:01, 12 November 2012 (UTC)