Template:Did you know nominations/Music of Rocket League

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The result was: promoted by Yoninah (talk) 19:51, 18 June 2018 (UTC)

Music of Rocket League

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• ... that producer Mike Ault's original soundtrack to Rocket League was a compilation of his personal projects that he had amassed over the years prior? (Source)
• ALT1: ... that the original soundtrack to Rocket League was a compilation of producer Mike Ault's personal projects that he had amassed over the years prior?
  • ALT2: ... that the original soundtrack to Rocket League consisted of the game composer's old music?
  • ALT3: ... that the composer of Rocket League used his old music to create the game's original soundtrack?
  • ALT4: ... that Rocket League's original soundtrack was a collection of the game composer's old music?

• Reviewed: Potato production in China

Moved to mainspace by PhilipTerryGraham (talk). Self-nominated at 17:17, 30 May 2018 (UTC).

General: Article is new enough and long enough
New enough: Long enough:

Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems
Adequate sourcing: Neutral: Free of copyright violations, plagiarism, and close paraphrasing:

Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation
Cited: Interesting:

QPQ: Done.

Overall: All checks out with very detailed referencing - GTG. violet/riga _^[talk] 16:24, 3 June 2018 (UTC)

• Generally we don't put people's names on the main page when they aren't linked to a Wikipedia article. And to write "a compilation of the producer's personal projects" is too alliterative. Yoninah (talk) 00:02, 15 June 2018 (UTC)

@Yoninah: Since you've made no alternative suggestion, I've tried my best to come up with three alternatives that make the sentence more sterile and doesn't explicitly mention Ault. Hopefully any of these suggestions above tickle you fancy? Otherwise, I have no idea what to aim for here. – PhilipTerryGraham (talk · articles · reviews) 11:53, 18 June 2018 (UTC)

Restoring thread. (Please add new alts to the thread, rather than rewriting them, so editors and promoters can follow the conversation.) Yoninah (talk) 11:57, 18 June 2018 (UTC)

@PhilipTerryGraham: thank you, that looks great! I only struck ALT2 because of the incorrect grammar. But ALT3 and ALT4 are exactly what's needed. Restoring tick per Violetriga's review. Yoninah (talk) 12:02, 18 June 2018 (UTC)

@Yoninah: Thank you. I've made a preference for ALT 3; hopefully the strikethroughs will make the preferred hook clear to the person putting this into the queue this time. – PhilipTerryGraham (talk · articles · reviews) 12:10, 18 June 2018 (UTC)

Yes, I agree with ALT3. The hook is written actively, not passively. Yoninah (talk) 12:18, 18 June 2018 (UTC)