- The following discussion is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: rejected by Miyagawa (talk) 13:12, 16 January 2012 (UTC)
Michael Spurr
edit- ... that Michael Spurr, currently Chief Executive Officer of NOMS, originally joined the England and Wales prison service in 1983 to become a borstal house master?
- Reviewed: Estonian icebreaker Suur Tõll
Created/expanded by Miyagawa (talk). Self nom at 11:02, 1 January 2012 (UTC)
3606 characters (new article), neutral, all statements cited; I don't see any signs of a copyvio. I don't really understand the hook; which prison service are you referring to, and what do you mean by "them" (who?) being "abolished"? Everything else checks out. HurricaneFan25 — 15:07, 1 January 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review, I've modified the original hook to specify which prison service and dropped the abolished part - I think the borstal part should be catchy enough. Miyagawa (talk) 15:16, 1 January 2012 (UTC)
Good to go. HurricaneFan25 — 17:43, 1 January 2012 (UTC)
Close paraphrasing concerns. Example: "initially managing the prison population and a system for managing disruptive prisoners called the Control Review Committee. After the publication of the Learmont Report in 1995, he led a review of the management of disruptive prisoners which eventually formed the Close Supervision Centre system" vs "he took up a post managing prisoner population and the Control Review Committee, a system for managing disruptive prisoners, and in the wake of the Learmont Report in 1995...he led a review of the management of disruptive prisoners that resulted in the creation of the Close Supervision Centre system." Nikkimaria (talk) 15:21, 3 January 2012 (UTC)
