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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:33, 16 February 2019 (UTC)

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  • ... that Marika Kouno was inspired to pursue a career in voice acting by Ikue Ōtani, the voice actress of Pikachu? Source: [1] "『ポケットモンスター』のピカチュウと『ワンピース』のチョッパーの声が同じ人（大谷さん）だと知ったとき、声優さんすごいなぁ～と思い、意識し始めました。私も子どもながらに漠然と「この人になりたい！」って思いましたね。 "

5x expanded by Narutolovehinata5 (talk). Self-nominated at 02:13, 15 January 2019 (UTC).

Solid facts on good sources, Japanese sources accepted AGF, no copyvio obvious. The article is safely long enough, so I suggest a bit of trimming, - no prerequisite for a pass, just suggestions:
  • "she was fond of reading, and she liked to read aloud", besides that the info is not tremendously interesting - you may loose your readers - it's repetitious.
  • "She first became interested" - and second?
  • Do we have a year for the "aspiring"?
  • I'd drop all these "would", - she did it, or not?
  • "She also participated in other activities such as playing basketball." - "She also played basketball."??
  • "After her graduation, she enrolled in a training school to hone her skills." - what else do you enter a training school for than to hone your skills?
  • No need to repeat training school the next sentence.
  • I'd like links for "music unit" and "idoö unit" - no idea what that means, unfamiliar with the topic, - or is it written only for those who know?
Same in the hook: can you avoid the repetition of "voice actress"? For example "who voiced Pikachu"? I prefer the original hook structure, where the topic is upfront. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 20:45, 17 January 2019 (UTC)
@Gerda Arendt: Would you be fine with these formulations then?
As for the content suggestions, unfortunately no year is specified for the aspiring part in the source, it's only mentioned that it was during her early life. I've simplified the "reading" part to focus on the "reading aloud" aspect, which could be said to be foreshadowing to her voice acting career. Basketball was not the only activity that she did other than voice acting, and the wording more-or-less reflected what was mentioned in the source. "First became" is a fairly common construction in English and doesn't necessarily mean there should be a "second" later on. I've replaced all mentions of "unit" with "group" to make things clearer. Any more suggestions? Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 00:43, 18 January 2019 (UTC)
Thank you for your changes and thoughts, related to a culture that is alien to me ;) - I'd drop that basketball sentence altogether, - unless she almost changed her mind to become a basketball player. You could say the same thing - there are other activities - about anybody. - Can you explain - just for my language skill - what in "she first became interested" is better, and by which difference, than "she became interested"? - I come to understand that "played" is used differently in English, because I understand that you don't see her playing as you'd see an actor playing. In one of my opera singer hooks, "performing" was changed to "playing" and I was about to say, wait isn't the singing aspect more important than the action on stage? Assuming that it means "identifies with a character", ALT0a is fine. ALT0b is not too good for people who have not known ;) - I also approve the following, because if a reader doesn't recognize Pikachu, Pokémon may also be a mystery, - better end on an amiable character:
*ALT0c ... that Marika Kouno was inspired to pursue a career in voice acting by Ikue Ōtani, who plays Pikachu?
- The date request is fine. I just wrote a bio for a 30 January birthday, - with unfortunately not a single source about youthful activities, not even studies. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 07:33, 18 January 2019 (UTC)
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