- The following discussion is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by PumpkinSky talk 23:42, 3 July 2012 (UTC)
Louise Cochrane edit
- ... that Louise Cochrane, creator of the 1950s BBC children's TV series Rag, Tag and Bobtail was an American?
Created/expanded by George Ponderevo (talk). Self nom at 23:27, 30 June 2012 (UTC)
Starting review. Length fine. Date technically should be June 29th; it's listed under June 30th. I'm not certain whether it makes a big difference. Date otherwise OK: recent article. It would be great if you could come up with a fourth reference. Will continue review. Anne (talk) 16:48, 1 July 2012 (UTC) Photo fair use (for article only). Hook correctly formatted, although I linked BBC Children's. Consider putting her birth name in the info box. Main issue: the phrasing is much too close to the original source, primarily #1 from the Telegraph Media Group, from which most of the information is derived. Please comb through your article and sources and reword. Also, please try to find an additional source. Sounds like Louise was a lovely lady. Anne (talk) 18:10, 1 July 2012 (UTC)
- I unlinked BBC Children's and made "children's" lower case. Piping Watch with Mother to "BBC Children's" seems odd, kind of eggy and unnecessary. MANdARAX • XAЯAbИAM 21:59, 1 July 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks for doing the review Anne. I've added a fourth reference, to the obituary published in the Edinburgh Evening News, but it doesn't really add much materially. I've done some rewording to address your concern about some of the phrasing being too close to the original, but quite honestly there's a limited number of ways in which one can reasonably say that Louise Cochrane joined the BBC in 1948, for instance. Nevertheless I've done what I can, and running the duplication detector tool shows that now the two primary sources (the obituaries from The Telegraph and The Guardian) are significantly more similar to each other[1] than this article is to either of them.[2] I hope that addresses your concerns. George Ponderevo (talk) 13:08, 2 July 2012 (UTC)
