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The result was: promoted by BobAmnertiopsis∴ChatMe! 22:20, 28 June 2014 (UTC)
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Louis John Gill edit
- ... that Louis John Gill was the original architect of the San Diego Zoo (entrance pictured)?
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Created/expanded by Keizers (talk). Nominated by MelanieN (talk) at 17:23, 26 June 2014 (UTC).
New (23rd), long enough, neutral, significant close paraphrasing needs to be addressed, QPQ done. Hook doesn't have an immediate ref in article (see 3b). Several paragraphs/bullets need citations. Please send a ping if I forget to respond. czar ♔ 02:44, 28 June 2014 (UTC)
I'm still seeing some close paraphrasing:
By 1913, Louis Gill was promoted to chief draftsman and a year later formed a partnership with his uncle known as Gill and Gill, Architects. During this time, Louis Gill assisted on the designs of the La Jolla Women’s Club, ... (source)
By 1913 Louis had been named Chief Draftsman for his uncle, and in 1914 they formed a partnership: Gill and Gill, Architects. During this time Louis contributed to the designs for the several notable buildings including La Jolla Woman's Club ... (WP article)
I'd go back to the sources and make sure that every sentence is presented as its own idea, not just in rephrased, parallel structures. "During this time", for example, should not just be replaced with another turn of phrase, but recast in such a way to be materially different from the source, etc. czar ♔ 18:52, 28 June 2014 (UTC)
